electric_rhino

Well, this is LOVE. or so I tried to make it love.
This is a poem that started as pure love, but the more I wrote, the more that started to took the form of a relationship. So I tried to make a poem from the whole thing, the begginin' of a relationship, and the end.

I hope you guys like it.

My heart has been ripped to shreds,
I can’t even recognize the person once I were.
I want to cry, scream and shout.
I want to punch a wall and tear the world down.

Be a tyrant, a warrior and a child,
Be your freedom, your peace and your smile.

And now that you're gone, the night has become a waste of my everlasting youth.
Even thought the stars sat on the sky to tell me it's alright,
The sun sets in on the morning to blew them out of the sight

But I start to built my wall once again
As I lay down on my bed and a tear runs down my face,
And I pray to god to take away this pain
As I see stranged my world, my family and my friends.

You became darkness and I became a star
You were sunshine and I swept away the clouds
You were lost and I were a map
You needed love and I pour away my heart

Is it true that love is not really happiness?,
That it’s trusting, pain and sadness.
Well, my love is supposed to give and never cry,
My love is yours and never dies.

Sometimes you fall so hard you can’t even see the ground,
So hard that you’re helpless and so out of breath you almost drowned.
But when you hit the ground, and the despair sets in,
Was the falling just a journey and the astound the destiny?

Love is serenity and peace
It’s kicking the pride, to where selfishness is.
Love is not only welfare,
Love is a mix of work, joy and sweat

I am through with the fights, the shame and remorse
I can’t live out of pity, fright and regret, I need more
My mind is setting free and the compassion comes back to me
The relief is getting’ lighter and I just don’t feel the grief.

Smile, sing and shout,
Hug, kiss and laugh.
My heart is jumping and my brain is holding my head high,
this is for givin' my heart without a regret,
this is for the times for you I've cried.

electric_rhino wrote:Love is serenity and peace
It’s kicking the pride, to where selfishness is.
Love is not only welfare,
Love is a mix of work, joy and sweat

And now that you're gone, the night has become a waste of my everlasting youth.
Even thought the stars sat on the sky to tell me it's alright,
The sun sets in on the morning to blew them out of the sight

You became darkness and I became a star
You were sunshine and I swept away the clouds
You were lost and I were a map
You needed love and I pour away my heart

TheLastSongbird wrote:This is beautiful! I can see the amount of work, thought and heart you put into this. I have a feeling that there's going to be a lot of tough competition

You became darkness and I became a star
You were sunshine and I swept away the clouds
You were lost and I were a map
You needed love and I pour away my heart

This part echoed something in my own heart...I can't quite explain how or why. It's one thing to write a poem, but it's another thing entirely for a reader to feel what you've written about. You really have a talent for this

electric_rhino wrote:Was the falling just a journey and the astound the destiny?

electric_rhino wrote:Love is serenity and peace
It’s kicking the pride, to where selfishness is.

Royal-Sweetness wrote:

electric_rhino wrote:Love is serenity and peace
It’s kicking the pride, to where selfishness is.

This is the most beautiful thing I have ever heard someone say. Thank you so much for sharing this beautiful poem

Nânâ wrote:till now, this is the best one I've read =)
good luck =)

You became darkness and I became a star
You were sunshine and I swept away the clouds
You were lost and I were a map
You needed love and I pour away my heart

TheBlueJayStar wrote:

You became darkness and I became a star
You were sunshine and I swept away the clouds
You were lost and I were a map
You needed love and I pour away my heart

that's really beautiful. i love it!

Loveisalwaysthere! wrote:i wish you luck it so awsome.....feel like i have no chance X3