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E.V.O.L. - Empty Vessels Of Loneliness

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Post by electrickisses Sun Nov 07, 2010 4:15 pm

Your love turned into dust.

Black specks touch my eyes.

The angels are going to cry tonight.

Thunder storms invade my heart

telling me not to fall apart.

All i can do is go to sleep,

close my eyes and drift away.

Sparkles of light fly all around,

pretty soon i'm going to drown.

Weightless, breathless, blue, cold.

Something dead is what i am.

Without your love i'm no longer human.

I hope you see it's your love that i need,

to give me air so i can breathe.
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Post by out of the hollow Sun Nov 07, 2010 7:42 pm

electrickisses wrote:
pretty soon i'm going to drown.

Weightless, breathless, blue, cold.

Something dead is what i am.

Without your love i'm no longer human.

Whoa, very haunting. I like it.
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Post by Helena Wed Nov 10, 2010 8:12 am

I like the occasional rhyming and all the metaphors, and how everything is put into simple short sentences. It's a pretty depressing poem though (just making a point here lol).
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Post by electrickisses Thu Nov 11, 2010 3:38 am

@ out of the hollow: Thanks! I was going for that kind of feeling.

@Helena: Thanks! Yea, it's meant to be depressing, i wrote it when i was in a depressing mood.
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Post by Krissy Thu Nov 11, 2010 6:56 am

very nice

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Post by Natt Sat Nov 20, 2010 7:37 am

I love your poem :)What was ur inspiration?
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Post by Guest Thu Dec 02, 2010 7:25 am

very sad and dark

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