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Post by Winter Mon Nov 22, 2010 12:00 am

I have to say that I found it a bit childish after I had written it.
Whatever. Feel free to express what you think. Some parts may be gramatically wrong or mispelled. Sorry in advance! I couldn't find a name for this poem.
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Never have I thought I'd have to think
What the next day would bring
"Nothing to cry for, go to sleep" you'd tell me and all would be fine
And you'd stand by my side
With you, I was alive
You were my sun, your shine was a reason to wake up
Everytime I look up in the sky so blue
It's like looking at blue eyes, reminds me of you
On a dreadful November day
You have gone
In my trashed little world, now it's always night
I can't wake up
I don't know how long, but I wait
Hoping that one day you'll come back
Before I fall somewhere beyond dark and light
Before it's too late.
But maybe you won't and I get sick of you not around
I will set my world on fire
And lose my rivers, my forests, my skies among ashes
As I watch the place I belong burn down
And as the flames warm me up
I'll be feeling bittersweet, but I'll be fine
I'll be singing as I lay on the ground:
"You were my sunshine without warmth,
You brightened my world, but you were cold..."
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Post by Claudia Mon Nov 22, 2010 12:09 am

This is amazing ^_^ it's not childish at all.

poems can be dramatic even though writing it yourself and thinking it is childish, to others it is brilliant.
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Post by Natt Mon Nov 22, 2010 2:52 am

This is my favorite part:
I will set my world on fire
And lose my rivers, my forests, my skies among ashes
As I watch the place I belong burn down
And as the flames warm me up
I'll be feeling bittersweet, but I'll be fine
I'll be singing as I lay on the ground:
"You were my sunshine without warmth,
You brightened my world, but you were cold..."

This poem is I think that good. I like your poem, and I see in my mind what you wrote in this poem .
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Post by Winter Mon Nov 22, 2010 4:06 am

You've just made me so happy, thank you (: x
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Post by YetiMoonchild Sat Nov 27, 2010 4:28 am

I like it very much (((((:
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Post by Guest Sun Nov 28, 2010 1:24 pm

very nice

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